First of all, I admire people, especially children, who like horses. I have never been a fan, always feeling nervous and uncomfortable around them. The way the stare at me it's like they know! But, having said that, I love your story! 1. Purpose- your purpose appears to be telling a story of how you gain three wonderful horses in your life and the activities that you engaged in with them 2. Dramatic Question- "it started with a pony" I cringed a tad when I read that because I got bit by a mini horse once and it scarred me for life emotionally lol 3. Emotion- a lot of emotion... pride, accomplishment, and happiness are all evident 4. Economy- obviously this isn't a video yet, but I believe that it will be between 3 and 5 minutes in length. 5. Images- all your personal pic really help the story to come alive. My absolute favorite is the last picture. They are really beautiful horses! 6. Audio- I would like to hear some upbeat, happy music
1. Purpose: This story is to show your love of horses and how they have had an impact on your life. 2. Dramatic Question: “It started with a pony.” 3. Emotion: A lot of people can relate to loving horses and wanting one when they were young. I love horseback riding and have always wanted to own my own horse. 4. Economy: Looking at your storyboard it should be between 3-5 minutes when you make it a video. 5. Images: I love that your images are real horses that are yours. It makes it better that you are in them and all of your horses and trophies are included as well. 6. Audio: I would say something upbeat and exciting would be something good to add.
First of all, I admire people, especially children, who like horses. I have never been a fan, always feeling nervous and uncomfortable around them. The way the stare at me it's like they know! But, having said that, I love your story!
ReplyDelete1. Purpose- your purpose appears to be telling a story of how you gain three wonderful horses in your life and the activities that you engaged in with them
2. Dramatic Question- "it started with a pony" I cringed a tad when I read that because I got bit by a mini horse once and it scarred me for life emotionally lol
3. Emotion- a lot of emotion... pride, accomplishment, and happiness are all evident
4. Economy- obviously this isn't a video yet, but I believe that it will be between 3 and 5 minutes in length.
5. Images- all your personal pic really help the story to come alive. My absolute favorite is the last picture. They are really beautiful horses!
6. Audio- I would like to hear some upbeat, happy music
1. Purpose: This story is to show your love of horses and how they have had an impact on your life.
ReplyDelete2. Dramatic Question: “It started with a pony.”
3. Emotion: A lot of people can relate to loving horses and wanting one when they were young. I love horseback riding and have always wanted to own my own horse.
4. Economy: Looking at your storyboard it should be between 3-5 minutes when you make it a video.
5. Images: I love that your images are real horses that are yours. It makes it better that you are in them and all of your horses and trophies are included as well.
6. Audio: I would say something upbeat and exciting would be something good to add.
I grew up on a farm, obsessed with horses! I never got involved in competitions, but I understand the love of this amazing animal.
ReplyDeleteI believe your point of view is to show your love of horses: where it began and how it progressed.
I think your dramatic question is "It started with a pony." This was an amazing hook. I found myself thinking, "What could she be talking about?"
Your emotional content steams from your love for horses, your drive to achieve, and your pride in those achievements.
Your images are wonderful! I love that they are personal pictures because it makes the story itself more personal.
Great job!