Both of my daughters have dreamed of owning a horse. I liked these lessons. There are always lessons to be learned from anything we've done. This is a good presentation of those lessons. Purpose: Life lessons from owning a horse Dramatic Question: Lessons I learned from owning horses Emotion: People care about lessons. We watch and listen to these lessons in case we missed one ourselves or so we can see how someone else learned their lesson. Economy: Story is between 3-5 minutes Images: I really liked the bar at the bottom that showed each lesson in print before you explained the lesson. All the pictures went well. Audio: You voice was clear and emotional. The music with the credits at the end was fun.
1. Purpose: This story is going through different lessons that learn when you own a pony. 2. Dramatic Question: The lessons you learned from owning a pony. 3. Emotion: A lot of people can relate to loving horses and wanting one when they were young. I love horseback riding and have always wanted to own my own horse. 4. Economy: Your story is between 3-5 minutes. 5. Images: I love that your images are real horses that are yours. It makes it better that you are in them and all of your horses and trophies are included as well. 6. Audio: Your voice was very easy to understand and flowed nicely with your images. I liked the music at the end. I would say that if you wanted to add anything you could add music during your story. Not too loud but something that is nice to hear.
Bravo Brittany! I enjoyed how you derived life lessons from your experiences with horses! You have a wonderful speaking voice! It captivates the viewers and helps feel connected to your! I cheered and felt proud of you when I learned you had won awards for your horse riding expertise! Great choice of music for the ending! Well done!
Brittany, Awesome story!! Who knew you could get so many wonderful life lessons while just horsing around??!! Seriously though, I think this was a great story, and shows that we can draw metaphors for life from all walks of life. Great job!! If I was going to change anything, I would make explicitly state the dramatic question, which, to me, is "What can you learn from a horse?" But, you did a great job, and I am very envious of your amazing horse riding skill!! Great job, Michael Gallimore
The best thing about your story is: It involves learning life lessons as the moral. I would like to know more about: your horses and how you specifically acquired an interest in them. One thing you should think about changing is: maybe adding some music throughout out the entire story background? Another good thing about your story is: It involves animals and many people can relate to that. You did a really good job! Nice work!
Wow, beautiful horses Brittany. I live across the road from a horse farm, so there are many of them out my way, in the fields surrounding my house. Your story is well-told and articulate, and your images are personal and meaningful. Your lessons are insightful and explained well. I particularly like when you give examples of what you mean, and things that have happened to you as a result of not knowing or following that particular lesson. I think if there is anything that could be improved, it would be to slow the narration down a bit. You have a lot of great information in your story. You should tell it nice and slow for us horse-ignorant people :) You could also add a quiet music soundtrack, but I'm not sure what would be most appropriate. Maybe some slow, quiet, classical music. You've obviously dedicated a lot of time and work to your riding, so it's good to see that you've been rewarded for that!
Brittany, The lessons your learned from your horses are very good ones. I think my favorite was #5 Bravery. I think that it’s important to know that they will fail, and that’s ok, as long as you pick yourself back up, and that takes a lot of bravery. Your story was very insightful into your love of horses, but I think it would benefit with some music.
Point of View/Purpose: I think the main parts of your story are your relationships with your horses, and how they have influenced your life. Dramatic Question: The question is how your horses influenced your life. You provide excellent examples of the changes they have made I you. Emotional Content: This story causes an emotional reaction because it is relatable. Almost everyone has a story connection to an animal or animals. Images: The Images you use are a good representation of your story about you and your horses!
The best thing about this story is it shows your bond with your horses. I think you covered everything really well! I like how you took the “lessons” approach. There’s nothing I would change. Another good thing about your story is how you explain each lesson.
I couldn't watch the video as it says it is set to private. If you want to email me a link, drop me a line at trfcax@gmail.com.
ReplyDeleteI have no idea why it uploaded as private, but it's fixed now. sorry about that :)
DeleteBoth of my daughters have dreamed of owning a horse. I liked these lessons. There are always lessons to be learned from anything we've done. This is a good presentation of those lessons.
ReplyDeletePurpose: Life lessons from owning a horse
Dramatic Question: Lessons I learned from owning horses
Emotion: People care about lessons. We watch and listen to these lessons in case we missed one ourselves or so we can see how someone else learned their lesson.
Economy: Story is between 3-5 minutes
Images: I really liked the bar at the bottom that showed each lesson in print before you explained the lesson. All the pictures went well.
Audio: You voice was clear and emotional. The music with the credits at the end was fun.
1. Purpose: This story is going through different lessons that learn when you own a pony.
ReplyDelete2. Dramatic Question: The lessons you learned from owning a pony.
3. Emotion: A lot of people can relate to loving horses and wanting one when they were young. I love horseback riding and have always wanted to own my own horse.
4. Economy: Your story is between 3-5 minutes.
5. Images: I love that your images are real horses that are yours. It makes it better that you are in them and all of your horses and trophies are included as well.
6. Audio: Your voice was very easy to understand and flowed nicely with your images. I liked the music at the end.
I would say that if you wanted to add anything you could add music during your story. Not too loud but something that is nice to hear.
Bravo Brittany! I enjoyed how you derived life lessons from your experiences with horses! You have a wonderful speaking voice! It captivates the viewers and helps feel connected to your! I cheered and felt proud of you when I learned you had won awards for your horse riding expertise! Great choice of music for the ending! Well done!
ReplyDeleteBrittany,
ReplyDeleteAwesome story!! Who knew you could get so many wonderful life lessons while just horsing around??!! Seriously though, I think this was a great story, and shows that we can draw metaphors for life from all walks of life. Great job!! If I was going to change anything, I would make explicitly state the dramatic question, which, to me, is "What can you learn from a horse?" But, you did a great job, and I am very envious of your amazing horse riding skill!!
Great job,
Michael Gallimore
The best thing about your story is: It involves learning life lessons as the moral.
ReplyDeleteI would like to know more about: your horses and how you specifically acquired an interest in them.
One thing you should think about changing is: maybe adding some music throughout out the entire story background?
Another good thing about your story is: It involves animals and many people can relate to that. You did a really good job! Nice work!
Wow, beautiful horses Brittany. I live across the road from a horse farm, so there are many of them out my way, in the fields surrounding my house. Your story is well-told and articulate, and your images are personal and meaningful. Your lessons are insightful and explained well. I particularly like when you give examples of what you mean, and things that have happened to you as a result of not knowing or following that particular lesson. I think if there is anything that could be improved, it would be to slow the narration down a bit. You have a lot of great information in your story. You should tell it nice and slow for us horse-ignorant people :) You could also add a quiet music soundtrack, but I'm not sure what would be most appropriate. Maybe some slow, quiet, classical music. You've obviously dedicated a lot of time and work to your riding, so it's good to see that you've been rewarded for that!
ReplyDeleteBrittany,
ReplyDeleteThe lessons your learned from your horses are very good ones. I think my favorite was #5 Bravery. I think that it’s important to know that they will fail, and that’s ok, as long as you pick yourself back up, and that takes a lot of bravery. Your story was very insightful into your love of horses, but I think it would benefit with some music.
Point of View/Purpose: I think the main parts of your story are your relationships with your horses, and how they have influenced your life.
ReplyDeleteDramatic Question: The question is how your horses influenced your life. You provide excellent examples of the changes they have made I you.
Emotional Content: This story causes an emotional reaction because it is relatable. Almost everyone has a story connection to an animal or animals.
Images: The Images you use are a good representation of your story about you and your horses!
The best thing about this story is it shows your bond with your horses.
ReplyDeleteI think you covered everything really well! I like how you took the “lessons” approach.
There’s nothing I would change. Another good thing about your story is how you explain each lesson.